Why would you say "she may have been threatened" when it's blatantly obvious that she was being offered a large sum of money. If she was being threaten into another date, she wouldn't be sounding somewhat ok with it. Her tone and what she says displays no fear or anxiety. I'm not trying to sound hateful here, it's just something you might wanna remove from the atrical or edit. However much is points to the money, she never actually says so you could keep it in there and possibly say something like "Evidence seems to point toward kokona being offered a large sum of money, but it is a possibility that she's being threatened of forced into another date." Again, not trying to sound hateful, just some advice for the atrical.