Talk:Budo Masuta/@comment-23798857-20160229221437/@comment-2248043-20160303024027

This is your edit.
 * Personally, "when" sounds better than "while".
 * It can be easier said on the Clubs page that leaders will only let people join if the leaders are at their clubs.
 * The "all of" part of the sentence made the sentence seem a bit more awkward.
 * Etc.