Talk:SNAP/@comment-26258959-20150908221936/@comment-27561449-20160224193039

This has multiple problems. 1st. Info-chan does NOT actually care about Yandere-chan. 2nd. Why would Yan-chan be buried behind the school, as opposed to getting a proper Japanese burial? 3rd. Senpai should have been just a little creeped out by all the pictures. 4th. Why does this story pick on Kokona? She got Senpai, and then he left her for a crazy girl who jumped off the roof, not to mention that she was expelled for literally no reason, AND she will be haunted by Yan-Chan's ghost for the rest of her human existence. And lastly, it's just really corny. I'm sorry if I sould harsh or mean. I wanted to give you some constructive criticism so you could improve the story, but sadly, I'm not sure if it's salvageable. Once again, I'm extremely sorry if this sounds overly negative or just really mean, but I'm just stating my opinion. It's a really beautiful idea, though, just... badly executed.